Review 6 Eric Olafson, Fleet Cadet GC VII



Review: 6) Eric Olafson, Fleet Cadet GC VII

FictionPress  Dec 28 at 6:23 AM

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Vanessa Ravencroft,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: 6) Eric Olafson, Fleet Cadet GC VII

Chapter: 5. Basic Training

From: mallah ( https://www.fictionpress.com/u/617211/ )

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Hi Vanessa,

this is about the 15th time that I have read this story...I love the rewrites...I have been reading books and stories since I was four...about 54 years now...ssshhh...lol. I usually do not point out grammar and spelling mistakes...but...I have tried not to...but...lol...I cringe whenever I read ...padded his shoulder... or ...he curtseyed......*sigh*... I hate to say this but...could you have used either patted or touched instead of padded? Also with men, it is bowing...women curtsey... wiki/Curtsey...thanks much...thank you for taking the time to write this story...and the rewrites.

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