Monday, July 9, 2012 3:46 AM

Re: The Adventures of a Greenie - Chapter 4 - from Story Line

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TO:vanessaravencroft@yahoo.com

Message flagged Monday, July 9, 2012 3:46 AM Message from: Paul

You have some very good stories going. I think I like Earth best so far, although I like the premise of this one as well. However you have a lot of typos and in Chapter 4 Mortimer Evans becomes Mortimer Jenkins. Also there is no lead up to the change to the first person when Roy gets on board the ship.

Please keep writing, your are off to a great start, I do not have your talent.

Thank-you

Paul