Saturday, July 7, 2012 9:19 PM

Re: The Adventures of a Greenie - from Story Line

FROM:Anonymous

TO:vanessaravencroft@yahoo.com

Message flagged Saturday, July 7, 2012 9:19 PM Sorry to give some rather vague feedback, yet your page heading suggests that's better than my leaving without any.

Green hell is OK so far; good start on plot, a little bit clumsy on the emotional content (boy and his robot, cold insensitive parents, heavy-handed patriotism) but still it moves right along. Really not enough yet to tell about the story though.

Good luck with the rest. It's definitely got potential.

Thanks,

Bill