New Review for Adventures of a Greenie 11

Message flagged Tuesday, November 6, 2012 7:47 AM Vanessa Ravencroft,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Adventures of a Greenie Chapter: 20. Chapter 20

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 * Its good but there are a few errors that need correction for example - One of

the ugly aliens approached. It was about two meters tall, had a somewhat humanoid body shape; bipedal, two arms and a head but that's where the humanoid similarities ended. It's head looked almost exactly like a fresh plugged and butchered chicken on top of their thin necks, complete with drumstick legs and fleshy little wings on the side. The eyes had the appearance of peeled onion bulbs stuck into the sides. The alien wore a long gown like garment in shimmering purples and silvers and his disturbingly ugly mouth, underneath the Onion bulb eyes opened and closed. "You have saved our lives. You saved my life! That shot was aimed at me!"

"It okay, Mr. Wurgus,I am sure you would have done the same."(if he is meeting him for the first time and clearly doesn't know what kind of alien it is how does he know that he is Mr. Wurgus).

Then he handed Roy a He handed me a little dice like cube. "This is a Lontghk Token making you a honorary member of my Pod group.(I don't think that i need to explain about this)

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