From: pearce49

Re: Roy's first story now complete

From: pearce496/24/2018, 11:45:27 AM

Hi, while I am currently still reading your Greenie story about Roy and others, I did find several typos,things a spelling / grammar checker would miss so either you or proofreader needs to give it a couple of editing passes.

One thing I did find very annoying was the many repeat sections, they also hurt the story flow. I want to read your overall very good story not have to read the same passages over and over.

That is my rant, keep writing inspite of me.

Regards, Patrick