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Story: Adventures of a Greenie Chapter: 9. Chapter 8

From: dru83 ( http://www.fictionpress.com/u/669308/ ) Reply URL: https://www.fictionpress.com/pm2/post.php?rwid=17638462 ---

Hey, just wanted to say that I've been enjoying this and I'm glad you're posting again. You've made some nice additions to this story, especially the lightning bolter section. There's still some minor things that could be fixed here, especially in the older sections of the story. There's several little grammar and punctuation things, plus there's several places where there are spelling errors that spell check would miss. For example, there were a few places in various chapters where you used the word "of" instead of the word "off". Spellcheck won't get that because of is a real word. Not a big deal, but it means the reader has to reread the sentence and figure out what you really meant.

All in all, no major problems, just some little things that keep the story from flowing as good as it can. Anyway, I'm really enjoying the story, so keep up the good work.