New Review for NILFEHEIM 5

[ New Review ] for NILFEHEIM Show Details FromFictionPress   [mailto:Tovanessaravencroft@yahoo.com Tovanessaravencroft@yahoo.com]  Vanessa Ravencroft,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: NILFEHEIM Chapter: 8. Lunch

From: Guest ---


 * Sorry, I read and write for enjoyment. the originial story seemed to follow

eric's liffe growing up and following the traditions of his world. this story just seems to try to explain why he wanted to leave his life as he knew it. the character development seems to rely on the reader having red the other version first. together this version is okay, but to me the originial version is a better stand alone story and is broader in it's scope. Thanks for opportunity to read both. Benny

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